{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"71387792","dateCreated":"1420984487","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"carolalfonso13","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/carolalfonso13","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71387792"},"dateDigested":1531982743,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ and Thesis Statement","description":"RQ: How did the changes in immigration policies affect the lives of America's newest residents coming through Ellis Island socially\/politically\/economically in the 19th through early 20th century?
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\nTS: The government passed legislation that limited the personal rights of the Chinese, southern and eastern Europeans comparef to the northern Europeand, creating an inequaluty gap because of the discrimination.
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\nThe entrance into The United Stated and the support of the government allowed the immigrants to offer their labor and created jobs for them essentially a benefit for the country and the immigrants.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78373934","body":"You should add some tension to your thesis for example > Due to the American governments passing of unequal legislation that limited the personal rights of \u2026\u2026 discrimination was an outcome? or something like that","dateCreated":"1421015031","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"Johanna1129","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Johanna1129","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78380832","body":"You did a good job answering your question but I agree with the previous comment just try and add some tension to it.","dateCreated":"1421035357","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"TheRealEric","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/TheRealEric","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78388748","body":"I like the first thesis more and think Johanna made a good point. I really like the "inequality gap" part, but wonder if you can narrow the impact of the inequality gap - for instance, what did it lead to in the lives of immigrants?","dateCreated":"1421064169","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78412084","body":"I agree that the first thesis is very good since it nicely compares different groups immigrating, but maybe use specifics like you did in the second one when you talked about jobs.","dateCreated":"1421113921","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"NicolePal7","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/NicolePal7","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71379326","dateCreated":"1420929482","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"16emersonc","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/16emersonc","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71379326"},"dateDigested":1531982743,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ's and Thesis statements","description":"RQ 1: To what extent did World War II demonstrate the positive economic effects of war?
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\nRQ 2: To what extent did patriotism factor into the economic boom in the United States during World War II?
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\nTs 1: World War II proved the economic success of some wars, because the unity of one country under a common goal motivated Americans to aid the war effort at any cost.
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\nTs 2: Patriotism played an enormous role in the domestic economy stimulation, because Americans put the needs of the country first, which resulted in fantastic economic contributions from citizens.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78372668","body":"Both thesis statements are good but you should clarify which one goes with what research question. Other then that its looking good","dateCreated":"1421011144","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"The_Bob_Father","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/The_Bob_Father","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78373816","body":"Your thesis is good but the wording could be changed slightly. How about: World War II's ability to unify Americans in the war effort allowed for its economic success.","dateCreated":"1421014692","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"Johanna1129","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Johanna1129","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78375436","body":"Colin, your theses look good, however I think you should maybe give a factual example in where you talk about "the needs of the country", to introduce the reader to what you're going to talk about.","dateCreated":"1421019107","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"canzanoswag","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/canzanoswag","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71377948","dateCreated":"1420923365","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"LazzariMichael","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/LazzariMichael","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71377948"},"dateDigested":1531982744,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ and Thesis Statement","description":"A Woman's right to vote was more strongly affected by Susan B Anthony and her campaigns than any other women's attempts.
\nDuring the late 1800s no woman was more influential to women's suffrage than Susan B Anthony.
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\nHow did specific individuals change how america viewed womens rights?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78375720","body":"I like how you focus on Susan b Anthony in both of them and I think that could make for a very clear paper but for the second I think specifying how and through what type of actions was she influential towards the movement would make it stronger and more specific","dateCreated":"1421019825","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"sierragoodhue","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/sierragoodhue","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78375992","body":"I think your topic is very interesting. Your RQ is good but it's a bit vague. It seems as though you're focusing specifically on Susan B Anthony for your paper. If that's the case, you could turn your RQ into "How did Susan B Anthony change how America viewed women's rights?" That being said, you have to be careful not to make your paper biographical.
\nAs for your thesis statements, I like them both.","dateCreated":"1421020542","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"celeste126","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/celeste126","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78376822","body":"I think that your thesis statements can be more specific, like exactly when during the late 80's and what campaigns she did.","dateCreated":"1421022877","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"henryz97","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/henryz97","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78378092","body":" You also need to consider that if you're arguing that Susan B. Anthony took specific actions then you need to prove that there were particular actions she took that others didn't (thereby you need to include other womens rights activists).","dateCreated":"1421026504","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78379910","body":"I like the thesis statements but maybe you could put more tension in. Also the RQ is very vague.","dateCreated":"1421032347","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"IndriusKveraga","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/IndriusKveraga","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78380934","body":"Its a good start to the thesis statement just try to add some specifics as to why Susan B. Anthony was such an important role in women's rights.","dateCreated":"1421035695","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"TheRealEric","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/TheRealEric","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78382802","body":"your thesis needs signiFicant woRk tO be be really solid, the research question has potential. Go more indepth and Find a ReAlly Compelling ThesIs ON how a few individualS shaped history.","dateCreated":"1421043946","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"JiechengDong","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/JiechengDong","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71373836","dateCreated":"1420899081","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"Lizalester","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Lizalester","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71373836"},"dateDigested":1531982745,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ and Thesis Statement","description":"What was the difference between what the government and the people were doing to help give animals equal rights to people during the animal rights movement?
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\nAlthough the animal rights movement was a revolution that both the government and the common people fought for, the people seemed to be more invested and interested in it.
\nBoth the common people and the government fought equally for animal rights, with the government using legal powers and the people using popularity and publicity to their advantage.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78354500","body":"Hi Liza,
\nI think the ending of your RQ is a little bit confusing, so I'd work on the word choice to make it a bit more concise. It seems like you have a good argument, I would just make that more evident in your thesis. I'd try adding some more tension and being less general.","dateCreated":"1420920259","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"clairesibold","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/clairesibold","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78369148","body":"I agree with Claire that your research question is a little confusing, try to make it clearer. Maybe start your RQ with 'Although during the animal rights movement, the government and people were'.... I like your thesis but I would add some tension to it to make it more argumentative.","dateCreated":"1420998264","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"christinaliu2","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/christinaliu2","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78378378","body":"Hey Liza!
\nI adore your topic. I agree with Claire and Christina that your word choice is kind of confusing. I think you should add specifics and be careful not to be repetitive with words. Good luck!","dateCreated":"1421027428","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"islagriffin","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/islagriffin","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78388870","body":"I also wonder if you can combine these two thesis statements into one fluid statement that not only acknowledges that both the people and the gov't took action towards animal rights, but that there was difference to how each participated - AND, that means that you'll have to identify an overall impact, for example, did the actions of the people (using popularity & publicity) have a difference impact that the gov'ts legal powers? Also, define what you mean by legal powers and popularity.","dateCreated":"1421064672","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71370576","dateCreated":"1420861420","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"NicolePal7","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/NicolePal7","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71370576"},"dateDigested":1531982745,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ and Thesis Statement","description":"How did flappers as a representation of the \u201cnew woman\u201d affect the image and lifestyle of ordinary women during the twenties?
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\nThesis Statements:
\nFlappers broke conformities of clothing and social behavior, causing women, especially young women, to change their perception of how they must act, causing women to begin to act in contrast to how men believed they should act.
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\nFlappers used their originality to promote a looser way of dressing and behaving, causing other women around them to realize new freedoms they could use in the form of new clothing and behavior.
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\nWomen\u2019s ability to go see flappers, who represented a breaking of conformities, gave them a new image other than the traditional woman, showing women that there was more than one option in how to act.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78350426","body":"I think you're last thesis is the strongest because it has the most tension and will make a better argument!","dateCreated":"1420899523","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"Lizalester","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Lizalester","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78374926","body":"I agree with Liza that your last thesis is the strongest. Instead of saying "the traditional woman" you could explain what the traditional woman was, were they conservative and domestic?","dateCreated":"1421017673","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"IsabelJones1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/IsabelJones1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78389572","body":"I agree with Isabel, identifying who the "typical women" of the era was is important. It is my understanding that the flappers represented a minority of the women of the time. Also, your last thesis is your strongest (and the least redundant), since it includes the comparison between flappers and traditional women however perhaps including the term "influenced" or "impacted" would better suit what you're going after.","dateCreated":"1421068063","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78396360","body":"Hi Nicole,
\nI think that the first thesis statement is kind of a run on sentence. If you broke it up into several sentences it would be a lot more effective.","dateCreated":"1421081359","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"juliahaidar","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/juliahaidar","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71368932","dateCreated":"1420850932","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"juliacodd","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/juliacodd","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71368932"},"dateDigested":1531982746,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ and thesis statement","description":"What were the main factors that led to the Stock Market Crash that ultimately led to the downfall of The Great Depression?
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\n1) Even though there were many evident causes of the Great Depression in the 1920's, economic explosion and modernization of industries ironically undermined the stock market.
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\n2) Although American industries were very successful soon after World War one, competition for these goods skyrocketed, deceiving people into thinking that they could gamble with their money and invest into these companies, yet it hurt them in the long run.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78353360","body":"I really like the first one- it is clear, has tension and answers your research question. The idea for the tension is good but i think that you need to be more specific. Being more specific will help strengthen your argument","dateCreated":"1420914051","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"acaraviello","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/acaraviello","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78354422","body":"HI julia
\nI think you need to reword the ending of your RQ at little bit. I feel like saying "the downfall of the great depression" sounds like the great depression is ending, when i think what you're saying is what triggered it? I really like your first thesis-the tension is really strong. Maybe add something onto the end of it that links the stock market to the great depression. Like make it clear that the crash of the stock market triggered the great depression.","dateCreated":"1420919713","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"clairesibold","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/clairesibold","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78355664","body":"Hi Julia,
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\nI agree with Claire that the wording is a little awkward in your RQ but I think that you can also clear up your second thesis by changing it to something more along the lines, "Although many American industries were thriving after World War one, competition for success skyrocketed, which encouraged the common man to gamble their money and invest into companies without considering the negative long term affects resulting in the crash of the stock market and Great depression" because some parts like "these goods" weren't clear to me. Sounds like this will be a good paper! Good luck :)","dateCreated":"1420925109","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"FadethGomez","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/FadethGomez","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78390682","body":"Claire is right, you should take in her comments and use them to refine your writing. Also, how was it ironic that the stock market was undermined? That needs more of an explanation.","dateCreated":"1421072230","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71363348","dateCreated":"1420831615","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"FadethGomez","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/FadethGomez","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71363348"},"dateDigested":1531982746,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ & Thesis Statement","description":"RQ: Did the politicians reasons to draft soldiers taint the view of what an American hero should be during the Vietnam War in comparison to the initial American soldiers in WWII?
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\nThesis Statement: Due to the government\u2019s decision on drafting, Vietnam War soldiers faced emotional trauma resulting in change of the ideal American soldier rather than WWII\u2019s recognition of men and women who put forth and sacrificed their lives as well.
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\nWithout the option of drafting, the government had given the WWII American soldier a different meaning as to the Vietnam veteran\u2019s due to the beliefs of enlisting because of patriotism and not force.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78352730","body":"Hi Fadeth! I really like your question\/thesis ideas! Just a few ideas on the wording: in the first one maybe make it more specific when you say "resulting in change of the ideal American soldier," like how they were viewed? or how they actually behaved? Then for the second one, when you say "not force" at the end, do you mean that the WWII soldiers chose to become soldiers while the Vietnam veterans were forced to become soldiers? To make that clearer maybe say instead of having the government force them to, or something. I understand both your thesis ideas but to make them even better you could manipulate the language to add tension with words of comparing the soldiers. Just some ideas:) But overall good job!!!","dateCreated":"1420910575","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"SylviaC4","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/SylviaC4","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78377578","body":"I agree with Sylvia's comments and think you should consider them! I also think "initial America soldiers" is weird wording, maybe initial isn't the right word (for the research question). Again, be more specific and use some words to describe the American hero and how does it compare to the soldier of the Vietnam War. My suggestion is taking some time to rewrite your arguments so you can find words that better articulate your ideas. Great job and good luck!","dateCreated":"1421025027","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"carolalfonso13","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/carolalfonso13","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78377758","body":"I like what both of these ladies have said - the second thesis to me has more of a focus since it includes a clearer parallel between WWII & Vietnam, (force vs, not), perhaps including the impact of conscription (required registry to the army) and volunteerism could work? And I think you're curious about the political reasons to draft (rather than politician) and the motivation, etc.","dateCreated":"1421025551","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71363320","dateCreated":"1420831466","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"D.MONNEYY","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/D.MONNEYY","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71363320"},"dateDigested":1531982746,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ & Thesis Statements ","description":"RQ:
\nWhy was it so complicated for Ailey to support his company finically?
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\nThesis Statement #1:
\nDuring the 1960's it was different for the Alvin Ailey Dance Theater to find funds because there was a lack of support for African American dancers due to the racism that existed at that time.
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\nThesis Statement #2:
\nDuring the 1960's it was different for the Alvin Ailey Dance Theater to find places to show their talent due to the limited dance showcase opportunities for African American dancers that resulted from the belief that African American dancers were inferior.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78353400","body":"I really like the first thesis! It needs some sort of tension, maybe you can say- how while many African Americans supported the dancers, the overall majority of Americans did not. I also think saying "it was different" is not specific enough. Saying exactly how it was different or how it changed in the sixties will strengthen the thesis.","dateCreated":"1420914326","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"acaraviello","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/acaraviello","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78353440","body":"also you could add "the belief that African American dancers were inferior" from your second thesis to the first thesis ad say: "..a lack of support for African American dancers due to racism and the belief that African American dancers were inferior that existed at that time."","dateCreated":"1420914644","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"acaraviello","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/acaraviello","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78391064","body":"Did you mean difficult instead of different? Or are you trying to point out the different treatment of african american dance companies in comparison to white dance companies? Have you found information about that?","dateCreated":"1421072885","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71363292","dateCreated":"1420831286","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"milbish","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/milbish","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71363292"},"dateDigested":1531982747,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ + Thesis Statement","description":"RQ: During the 1960's and 70's, what forces held the United State's population of women back from joining the feminist movement?
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\nThesis: The feminist movement of the 1960's and 70's was extremely difficult for women to join due to the lack of attention paid to the education of women, the denial of the relevance of the feminist movement from the media, and the dissaproval of the feminist movement by the male population.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78337028","body":"You should add a "so what" at the end because you're just listing reasons.","dateCreated":"1420831561","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"D.MONNEYY","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/D.MONNEYY","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78352826","body":"Hi Milly! I agree with Dyana about adding the "so what." I like your ideas but you are just listing three reasons, to fix this maybe find a common thread in the three reasons, like the women being subordinated by the men in society or something? You should also add some tension to show the irony that women are not joining the movement even though they are women and should want equality between men and women. I can tell there is some tension in the argument but it is not really clear with the wording. Also, I don't know if you will mention this later on in your paper, but you could discuss what made some women join the movement while others did not. Overall great job!!:)","dateCreated":"1420910992","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"SylviaC4","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/SylviaC4","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78396866","body":"Also, are you noticing this because the movement itself wasn't open to women or didn't publicize to certain women? Were specific womens groups not inviting to women or not letting enough women know? Is that part of what you're asking? I think in your question you need to indicate to what extent women were involved so that your answer is more narrow.","dateCreated":"1421082313","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78396868","body":"Also, are you noticing this because the movement itself wasn't open to women or didn't publicize to certain women? Were specific womens groups not inviting to women or not letting enough women know? Is that part of what you're asking? I think in your question you need to indicate to what extent women were involved so that your answer is more narrow.","dateCreated":"1421082315","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]},{"id":"71362808","dateCreated":"1420829780","smartDate":"Jan 9, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"amymmcclurg","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/amymmcclurg","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/msgordonsushistoryacp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/71362808"},"dateDigested":1531982747,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"RQ & Thesis Statements","description":"Question:
\nHow did the women\u2019s rights movement during the 1960s and 1970s influence the \u201csilent majority\u2019s\u201d opinion of the degree of conservatism president Nixon and the legislature passed under his presidency embodied?
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\nTheses:
\n1. Although president Nixon claimed to support conservative ideals, the second-wave feminist movement of the 1960s and 1970s appealed to the federal and state governments, causing the \u201csilent majority\u201d to question and disapprove of the tolerance emitted from the White House.
\n2. Despite gaining agency as president by declaring himself a conservative, the augmentation of second-wave feminism and political results from its appeal to federal and state government forced the \u201csilent majority\u201d to repudiate his political allegiance.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"78350442","body":"I think both of your theses have good information, but I think you need to add more tension to create more of an argument!","dateCreated":"1420899639","smartDate":"Jan 10, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"Lizalester","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Lizalester","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78374068","body":"I disagree with Liza, I think both theses have good tension because it shows how he claimed to be conservative but supported the feminist movement, but it might help to explain that a little more and make it more explicit. I think your first thesis is stronger and direct, but the use of "appealed" is a little confusing here.","dateCreated":"1421015436","smartDate":"Jan 11, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"IsabelJones1","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/IsabelJones1","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78389690","body":"I agree with Isabel - both of these thesis statements have tension yet you need to more strongly identify the connecting between the second wave feminism of the 1960s-1970s and Nixon. Its unclear whether Nixon & the legislature supported feminism and that caused a specific reaction from the "silent majority".","dateCreated":"1421068670","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"EmilyGordon","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/EmilyGordon","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}},{"id":"78412162","body":"The previous comments were what I was thinking when I first read this- I think your idea is very unique and interesting and I really like it, but try and be a little more specific about the tolerance.","dateCreated":"1421114260","smartDate":"Jan 12, 2015","userCreated":{"username":"NicolePal7","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/NicolePal7","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":true},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}